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Fighter by ~borderlinejustfine:iconborderlinejustfine:

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I'm a fighter
Brawl with god
Chanting rages
"Oh mah Lawd"

Stomp my feet and
Shake my fist
Crying sorrows
Knife and twist

With the blood spilt
Spit my curse
For your heaven’s
So much worse

Stand my ground now
Lose your way
gone to morning
Star today

I'm a fighter
Spear and bone
Face the charges
on my own

Call defeat and
Wear the Crown
Your thorns adorned
Beaten Down
©2008-2009 ~borderlinejustfine
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Submitted: May 8, 2008
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Work in progress. much editing, i need my MIA cd on lol, it was inspired by it. Kala, not Arular
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~Valethia:iconValethia: May 8, 2008, 7:23:58 PM
Brilliant! Really, it's one of my favorites.

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~borderlinejustfine:iconborderlinejustfine: May 8, 2008, 7:31:45 PM
oh thank you i really like the feel of this one, im experimenting with beats in the background while i write.. it seems to add something. coming from you it means a lot cuz you are a long time watcher

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~DigitalScorpion:iconDigitalScorpion: May 16, 2008, 10:16:38 AM
This is interesting. I didn't like it the first time I read it, but before commenting I went back and read it a second time. It's well versed, a little angsty but still it flows nicely.
~borderlinejustfine:iconborderlinejustfine: May 16, 2008, 5:33:14 PM
this like the other poem you commented on were witten while listening to music, going with the flow and tone of the beat, and like i said i need to revise it. this is completely undone

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~DigitalScorpion:iconDigitalScorpion: May 16, 2008, 6:07:51 PM
I understand. Like I said I was just giving my thoughts on what it is you had here.
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